Perfecting Paragraphs~Day 2

This is Day 2 of my Perfecting Paragraphs series.

Frame by Lovin' Lit, Kimberly Geswin Fonts, Clipart by Melonheadz Illustrating

On Day 2, I put up another picture and asked my kids to write a descriptive paragraph.

After they finished writing, I did a mini-lesson on how to improve their writing.

I used the polar bear picture we had previously worked with.

I started off by showing them how to take notes, of what they first notice.

We talked about how to work off what they notice first-as that is probably the biggest part of the picture.

Then we worked outward-what details they noticed. We made sure to add in plenty of adjectives.

We reread (and caught some mistake I made while typing!), and added in a few more adjectives.

Now it was their turn! I posted instructions on the board (for those who did it for center work)

and set them free! They wrote their 2nd draft in pen, so we could easily see the difference.

The revised drafts are much better!

Smiles and Sunshine,
Kaitlyn